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Some Hiaku (haikus?)

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Watch that Big brother?

No, I don’t watch that rubbish.

But I hope Craig wins.

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I love you so much

I can’t take my eyes off you.

Pass the remote, please.

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The man who told me

“The end of the world is nigh”.

Didn’t say which end.

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They’ve gone and done it.

That’s the four-minute warning.

Time for a beer, then.

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Who’s there? Friend or foe?

It’s your mother-in-law, chuck.

Oh bother! Now, what?

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I’m sort of vegan.

I only eat animals

That never eat meat.

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If meat is so wrong,

Why did God make pigs and cows

Out of pork and beef?

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She said, “I love you”.

He said “And I love you too”.

They were both lying.

haikus Hiaku Some

Interesting poems. What first got you into writing Haiku style? And do you write any other types of poems? I would be interested in reading more of your writing.

Some Hiaku (haikus?) UFO & Writing Art Education Sciences

I have always been interested in writing fiction, but never really did anything about it until last year when I attended a creative writing course.

The course syllabus included poetry which I wasn't particularly keen on, but I had a go.

To my great surprise, I found that I loved writing poetry, and have produced a dozen or so poems that I am quite proud of. I am also writing an epic narrative comedy poem about an 18th century adventurer.

I like to write poetry that rhymes, scans, has metre and rhythm. I am not keen on free or blank verse. I think that a lot of what people call poetry is just prose cut into odd lines.

I started writing haikus as an exercise in class. I like the constraints of 5-7-5 syllables, and that, if done properly, the third line has some kind of twist or pay-off.

As you're interested, I will post another poem for you to look at. I'd be grateful for any feedback.

--- I just tried to start a new topic to post my poem but, apparrently, I have reached my limit of 1 topic a day. I will try again later. Look out for it. The poem is called "When This is Done".

Edited: mikejonesuk on 11th Jun, 2005 - 9:02am

haikus Hiaku Some

Writing haiku is an incredibly difficult thing to do well, especially if writing poetry does not come natural. I'm taking a creative writing course, and our first assignment was to write three haiku. I struggled with it so much! I am not a poetry writer by any means. Fiction, non-fiction type stuff I can do, but not poetry.

Haiku normally take something to do with nature and man and then combine them, which is what I tried to do with two of my three.

I can only remember two of my three right off the top of my head:

Chirp! Chirp! Chirp! Cricket sings
Fingers drumming Tap tap tap
Silence

Badly written haiku #2:

Bright red, shiny paint
Sparkling bright in the sun...
Splat! The birds...